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Band 1

Government investment in the arts, such as music and theater, is a waste of money, government must investment this money in public services. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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, a lot of governments show clear
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support
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diffrents
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different
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arts
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, like
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music and theater etc. And
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another
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side
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of
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the
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another governments
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another government
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fuocs
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focus
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investment
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 in public services . Accully, I think
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importent
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important
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countries
 to get a budget for the art
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,
becouse
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because
 the arts
secton
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sector
, its have a
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different
kind
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to
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investment
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 money
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example
, the artisist can
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pay
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 art and work .
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, he can to
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sing
 his projects, so the
investment
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arts
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 in my opinion ,
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waste
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 of time and money, you can
easelly
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easily
to
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make it a big
investment
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 not only for the government
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but
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 for any
artisit
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artist
 in the
worlds
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world
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task response
Make sure your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. It should be clear whether you agree or disagree with government investment in the arts.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas need to be organized in a logical order. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and connect to the next smoothly.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger and helps the reader understand your ideas better.
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Check your spelling and grammar. Mistakes can make your writing hard to read. For example, 'support' instead of 'suport' and 'important' instead of 'importent'.
task response
You have provided a clear opinion that supports investment in the arts, which is good for task achievement.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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