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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
The two maps illustrate the layout of Southwest Airport at present and its planned development, which will take place after
year
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a year
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. In general, what stands out from the figure is that the placement of
airport
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the airport
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 will expand significantly and new facilities will be added for passengers.
Firstly
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,
it is clear that
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 the number of gates will
install
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be installed
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 from 8 to 18 and will
build
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be built
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 in the Y-shape.
Moreover
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,
Sky
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a Sky
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 train will be added in the middle of
gates
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the gates
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fo
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to
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connecting
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connect
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 them.
Secondly
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, the shops will be placed before
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the secity
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secity
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security
 and passport control zone. In the left-hand corner of the
departures
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departures,
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 the bag drop zone will be
arrangged
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arranged
 for the convenience of people.
In addition
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,
in
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apply
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the opposite check-in desk will be placed. As for the cafe, it will be replaced under
of
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apply
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the bag
drops
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drop
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 place. New facilities
such
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 as an ATM and car hire service will be located
in
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on
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 the right-hand of the arrival sections. In conclusion, the Southwest Airport will expand significantly, increasing the number of
fasilities
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facilities
such
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 as an ATM, car hire service, and shops.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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