IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The chart below shows the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000, with projections till 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of whole world population in four countries from 1950 to 2000, with projections till 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts information about the proportions of the global
population
Use synonyms
 of four different countries between 1950 and 2000, and its predictions for 2050. Units are measured in percentage
Overall
Linking Words
, China and India show a similar trend of large populations in the past and relatively higher populations projected in 2050.
However
Linking Words
, the
Unites
Correct your spelling
United
show examples
 States of America and Japan both recorded fewer
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
show examples
people in the past years and will still have
lesser
Correct article usage
a lesser
show examples
 number of people in 2050.
Although
Linking Words
 China's
population
Use synonyms
 was 25% in 1950 and about 20% in 2000, its
population
Use synonyms
 is expected to reduce steadily to about 18% in 2050. India's
population
Use synonyms
 shows a gradual
incremential
Correct your spelling
incremental
 trend from 15%,
about
Change preposition
to about
show examples
 19%, and to about 21% from 1950, 2000 and 2050 respectively.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the
population
Use synonyms
 of America declined minimally from 10% at the beginning of the period to about 8% and is projected to remain the same at approximately 8% till 2050.
In addition
Linking Words
, Japan's total
population
Use synonyms
 shows a downward pattern from 5% to about 3% in 1950 to the end of the period.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 7 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic shifts
  • population percentage
  • projection
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • laggard
  • steady state
  • global dynamics
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • environmental implications
  • population trend
  • significant change
What to do next:
Look at other essays: