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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the movement of
people
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 from the countryside to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.
Overall
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,
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country
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countries
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a
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A
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 and
c
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 showed
a
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apply
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rapid growth through the time
period
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,
while
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country
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b was
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B
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 steadily
increasing
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increased
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. In 2000 the movement of
people
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 moving from rural areas to urban areas for
country
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 a and
b
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 was nearly 18 and 10 respectively.
Country
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's
a
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number increased in 2005 reaching approximately 30
people
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 and it was the highest
through out
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throughout
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 the
period
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 as it
keept
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kept
 increasing just
untill
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until
 2020 when
country
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c
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 exceeded
country
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a
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A
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. In the
mean time
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meantime
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,
country
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c
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 presented
a
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apply
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dramatic growth through 2005-2010, in
this
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period
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 it
surpased
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surpassed
country
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b
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 and continued growing as it showed
significant
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a significant
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 upward trend till the end of the
period
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. The two countries will continue their increase in 2025.
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country
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Country B
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b
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 was higher than
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country
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Country C
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c
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 in 2000 and 2005,
then
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 it became the lowest out of the three.
Never the less
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Nevertheless
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, it grew steadily
untill
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until
 2020
where
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when
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 it stayed the same at 25
people
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, and it will keep being that way in 2025
also
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, country, c, period, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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