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The demand for coaching services has grown significantly in the digital age, with online coaching platforms becoming prevalent. Some now feel online coaching is a superior option to in-person coaching. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

coaching services
has
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have
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 grown
day
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 by
day
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 in the digital
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platfrom
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platform
 and
the
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apply
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online coaching is the best option
compare
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compared
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 to
in person
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in-person
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 coaching.
i
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I
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 agree with
this
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 statement. Online coaching
save
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saves
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the
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apply
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time
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 and hassle
free
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hassle-free
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.
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 online coaching
affordable
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is affordable
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 and
acess
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access
wide
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a wide
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 range of
specialist
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specialists
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 and
coaches
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. Online coaching
save
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saves
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 our travel
time
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 and
this
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time
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 we
are utilized
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utilise
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others
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others'
other's
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 work or education. And
or
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our
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 body and mind refresh so we are attentive in
the
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apply
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class
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. and no matter
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the coaches
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coaches
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coach's
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 area . Online coaching is a digital
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platfrom
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platform
any
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in any
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 area . any country people
acess
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access
 to join the classes. pupil only requires internet ,
laptop
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a laptop
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 or phone and
Good
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a Good
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 network.
Day
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 by
day
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 online coaching is popular because
manty
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many
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students
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class
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 together.
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 ,
in person
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in-person
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 coaching
jahid
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traveling
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travelling
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time
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around
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of around
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 30 minutes and
sixety
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six
student
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students classes
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class
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 together and noise
is
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was
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 the biggest problem he did not understand the topic.but nowadays online classes save his travel
time
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30
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by 30
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 minutes and no sound pollution
help
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his
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him
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 get the point. Digital
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platfrom
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platform
coaches
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is
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are
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 affordable
beacuse
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because
online
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the online
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platfrom
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platform
 teacher or
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coaches
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coach
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 fee is
minimum compare
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minimal compared
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 to
on site
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on-site
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 coaching.
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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students
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acess
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access
wide
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a wide
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 range of
coaches
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 .
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rana
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Rana
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 math coaching
near
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is near
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 their house ,
walking
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within walking
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 distance
10
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of 10
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 minutes and
number
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a number
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 of 45
students
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class
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 together and coaching fees
BDT
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 1500tk. monthly. nowadays,
rana
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Rana
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admit
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pn
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apply
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the
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apply
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online classes in mathmatics
monthly
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with monthly
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 fees
only
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of only
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 BDT500tk. and
number
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a number
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 of 45
students
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class
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classes
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 together. So, Rana
save
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saves
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 his
time
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also
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 money. In
this
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 paragraph, we get the
point
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points
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online
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for online
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class
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 better
compartively
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compared
in
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to
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side
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the side
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class
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.
Its
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It's
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 save our money and travel
time
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 .
Also
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acessble
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accessible
wide
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a wide
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 range of
coaches
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.
Day
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 by
day
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 digital
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platfrom
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platform
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class
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classes
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more
Add a missing verb
are more
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 popular .

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task achievement
Your introduction states your agreement clearly, but it could provide a clearer overview of the main points you will discuss. Consider briefly mentioning key benefits of online coaching that you will explore.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one main point. This makes your essay easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (like 'firstly', 'for example', 'in addition') to connect your ideas more clearly. This will help your reader follow your thoughts more easily.
task achievement
Try to use a wider variety of vocabulary and check for spelling mistakes. This will help improve the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion about online coaching being superior, which is good for the essay's purpose.
task achievement
You provide examples of how online coaching saves time and money, which adds strength to your argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demand
  • services
  • significantly
  • online
  • platforms
  • coaching
  • superior
  • option
  • convenience
  • clients
  • sessions
  • travel
  • time
  • access
  • range
  • specialists
  • choose
  • specific
  • needs
  • affordable
  • overhead
  • costs
  • rates
  • traditional
  • interaction
  • environment
  • connection
  • benefit
  • verbal
  • cues
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