The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 
The line chart depicts the proportion of female workers in various countries around the world, aged 15-64 from 2003 to 2009. From an
overall
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perspective, it is readily apparent that
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the percentage
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of female
emplyees
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employees
rose in all the countries,
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however
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however,
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only Iceland shows
minor
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a minor
the minor
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decline. After analyzing the line graph, it can be seen that
,
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there was
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a negligible
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difference of 10% in the figures for female employment in Iceland, Canada and Germany ( 81%, 69%, and 59%, respectively). Over the next 4 years, Canadian employment began to
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up to 65% in 2009 and Iceland shows
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a downward
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trend dropping to end at 78%. Canada was more stable and concluded the period at precisely 70
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.
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, Chile and
Turkey
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employment ratio of
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women
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were
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lower throughout the period at 35% and picked up to 40% for the remaining years. Chile was at 35
percent
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per cent
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in
former
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the former
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year but
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later
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it increased by 5 % and
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showed
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stable growth by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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