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Tlak about One of the lessons you learned from you father.

Today I will talk about one of my father's lessons
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. My origin taught me a lot of things, and one of the most important lessons in my life was, when I was reckless, after that all my life changed because he taught me how must I respect others. One day I was
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school with my dad
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 I saw
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 boy cross the street and I threw a water bottle at him, My parent stopped and made me
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 to him. After I did he took the boy with him in the car to school and let me walk. When I started walking he asked the boy to throw a water bottle at me, it was a message. If someone did it to me will I accept it or not? I realized from that time that I must respect all others and he told me not to do anything will not accept it .
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 If we want to live a beautiful life we have to respect and care about each other. Thank you for reading my paragraph.

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coherence and cohesion
Add a clear introduction to tell the reader what the essay will be about.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'first', 'next', and 'finally' to help with the flow.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure you have a clear conclusion that sums up what you learned from the story.
task achievement
Clarify some sentences for better understanding. For example, explain why throwing the bottle was wrong.
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Add more details about how this lesson has influenced your actions since that day.
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The story has a meaningful message about respect.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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