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The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph provides information on the proportion of males and females in higher
education
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, measured in thousands, in the United Kingdom, in three academic years with two modes of attendance.
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, the data contained within the visual representation reveals that the enrollment of men in part-time
education
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 was higher in comparison to women
whereas
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 both genders had the same level of attendance as full-time
students
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. As the diagram depicts, males in full-time
education
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 demonstrated an upward trend, increasing by around 100
students
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 from 1970-71 to 1980-81 and standing at nearly 230 pupils in the early 90
’s
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. Apart from that, the participation of male
students
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 in part-time
education
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 slightly fluctuated over the years, falling from 1000 learners in the 70
’s
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 to 900 in
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last
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 year.
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, the involvement of women in full-time
education
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 soared significantly by a little bit more than twofold,
raching
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reaching
 220 in the
80
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80s
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’s
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 and growing by approximately 10 individuals in the following decade. A similar pattern was demonstrated by females in part-time
education
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 as figures grew negligibly since the
70
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70s
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’s
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, standing at about 820
students
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. The segment of women surged dramatically, levelling at around 1100 in the 90
’s
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.

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