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Some teachers tend to reward students with high academic results. Others, however, support and reward students that improved their grades. Discuss both view and vive your opinion.

The debate about whether
teachers
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 should encourage
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students
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 with high
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 or with developed
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 remains ongoing.
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 some believe that only
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 with high academic levels should be supported, others claim that
students
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 who showed improvement in their
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 require more attention. I firmly believe that
teachers
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 should focus on supporting
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 who
show
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 consistent improvement in their academic
performance
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. on one hand,
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top-performance performance
students
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 deserve more attention than other
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students student
 for several reasons.
first,
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they have been shown
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high-level level
performance
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 even with personal or academic distractions. knowing that their effort is not transparent will encourage them to maintain their level for the long term.
Secondly
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,
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 individuals are more likely to participate in the country's growth and
this
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in contrast
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,
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 development
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 one certain point in some subjects,
while
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 countries' development requires individuals with a deep knowledge background.
on the other hand
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,
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 with improved
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 deserve more
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 and rewards. Some
students
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 lack academic
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 in their environment which makes them less confident,
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this
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 low
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. With
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'
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 and
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 they tend to
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 significant growth in their academic level and are more likely to come up with practical solutions that serve their countries. From my perspective,
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 should
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 developed
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 and boost their confidence
as well as
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, the majority of school
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 belong to
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 with improved
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 categories, motivating them will maintain the education dynamic and improve the communities
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,
according to
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 a 2023 study conducted by The Ministry of Education in the USA.
To sum up
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,
although
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 supporting
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student
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 serve as an investment in a country's development, developed
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 tend to perform better with consistent motivation and protect the life dynamic. I totally believe that the government should invest more and more in
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 to
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 rewards and teacher
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Your opinion is clearly stated in the introduction.
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You presented both sides of the argument fairly well.
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