Many students find their first week at university challenging. What are some of the difficulties students may face during this time, and what can universities do to help them adjust?

When I
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at the university, I
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very nervous. A lot of students
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already
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in the classroom, and everyone
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smarter than me. I
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that maybe I have
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the wrong place. But
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, I remembered my parents
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told me to be confident. Since
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, many things
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changed, and I have been
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new people every day. I still remember that I
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made a friend on the
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me with directions. He
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the campus very well and always
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me where to go. The lectures
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at 8 in the morning, and usually, we
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learned about basic concepts in our field. Sometimes, the professor
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too fast, and I
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important notes. Once, a lecture was
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, but the video
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uploaded correctly, so none of us was able to watch it later. By the time I was adapted to the new routine, midterms already
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arrived. I
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studied very hard, but my
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not
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me. Some questions were
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incorrectly because I
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the instructions.
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Thursday, I
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submitted my
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research paper. It
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to the professor in the morning. I hope it will
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carefully, even though some parts
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written quickly. I believe I have tried my best. Tomorrow, we will be
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a group photo for the university magazine. I’m excited, but I will
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to bring my ID card unless I set a reminder. My clothes for the event will not ironed unless my roommate
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me. He said he
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do it after lunch, but I don’t trust him completely. Next month, we will
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finished the
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semester. By that time, many of us will be
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how to manage time better. Assignments will
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completed, exams will
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, and hopefully, mistakes will be reduced. Looking back, I think my experience
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teaches me how to survive. Even though a lot of things
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wrong, I’m proud that I didn’t
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up. I know that by the end of the year, I will improving more and more. And maybe, one day,
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story will be
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in the university blog. Or maybe not — it depends
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my English
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improving fast enough!

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Your essay has a clear personal story, but you should focus more on the difficulties faced by students and how universities can help. Make sure to answer the question fully and clearly.
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Try to improve the flow of your writing by using more linking words and phrases between ideas. This will help readers follow your thoughts better.
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There are many grammar and vocabulary mistakes. Take time to check your work for errors in tense and sentence structure. Using correct grammar will help make your message clearer.
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