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The graph below show the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The graph below show the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The provided graph represents the mean monthly cost
change
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 by per cent of three metals for the year
of
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apply
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2014.
Overall
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, all metals underwent a drop at the
beggining
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beginning
 and
rise
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a rise
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 by the end of the year.
Nickel
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 had the
most high
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highest
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 rate of
change
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 among the subjects
,
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 but eventually
leveled
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levelled
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 off with others.
Copper
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 and
zink
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 regained almost the same
change
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 in price
scince
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since
 the fall
in
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at
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 the start. In detail,
nickel
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 showed
negative
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a negative
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 trend, having
6
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a 6
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% growth in price in January,
wich
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which
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 dramatically decreased within two
month
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months
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, reaching 1%. Meanwhile,
zink
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 peaked in
february
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February
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, rising from 1 to 3 per cent positive
change
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. After that,
zink
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 and
nickel
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 were going down slightly
untill
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until
 May, when they hit a low of -1% and -3%, respectively.
Copper
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 was steadily declining in price
change
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 rate,
loosing
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losing
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 approximately 2.5% and becoming about 0.5% between May and June.
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three of them witnessed an increase,
wich
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which
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 was followed by a plateau:
copper
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 remained
1
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at 1
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%,
zink
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 had around -0.5% and
nickel
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was staying
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stayed
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 at -1%.
Then
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,
nickel
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 and
zink
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 continued with another dip, and
finally
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 reached 1% and 2% each.
Copper
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's rate decreased marginally and climbed to approximately 1.5% by December.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words change, nickel, copper, zink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average
  • change
  • prices
  • metals
  • rise
  • decrease
  • fluctuate
  • increase
  • stabilize
  • sharp
  • stable
  • months
  • features
  • compare
  • report
  • during
  • 2014
  • data
  • rise
  • decline
  • prices
  • metal
  • show
  • suggest
  • overall
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