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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the modern world, globalisation has led to a growth in migration. It is believed by many that residing in a foreign nation in which an individual has to speak the native
language
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 can lead to serious practical
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 social issues
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 communication barriers. I agree with
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 notion completely and I will discuss points in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, not being able to fluently speak the native
language
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 of the particular nation can lead to communication problems and barriers which
contributes
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 to an individual's points being unclear
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 which there can be
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 rise in
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 at the workplace. It can
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 lead to the person having difficulty understanding the native speakers thereby resulting in
cross cultural
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 barriers and loneliness which
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 deteriorates mental
well being
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.
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, the individual faces plenty of hardships in
day to day
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 life, if they cannot read or understand the commonly used
language
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 which can lead to difficult situations in a foreign land where most of the sign boards and product names are written in the native tongue. Several issues arise
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 travelling, buying groceries, reading menus, and traffic signs, eventually, disrupting the normalises in everyday life.
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, there are several steps to overcome
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 problem. Primarily,
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 advancements in technology, there are
alot
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a lot
 of translators, and courses to learn the
language
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 easily at home and at affordable rates.
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,
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 English being the universal
language
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, most people already know and use English at work and in daily life which can help in some early days.
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, a plethora of locals are
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 very enthusiastic
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 foreigners and
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 them feel comfortable and at ease
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 talking to them.
To conclude
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,
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 me a person should have some basic knowledge about the
language
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 of the country they are migrating to, to aid in their everyday routine,
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however
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 a person cannot avoid some of the practical and social problems as they are inevitable.

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Your introduction clearly states your agreement with the topic, setting a clear direction for your essay.
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You have acknowledged potential solutions to the problem, which shows depth in your thinking.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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