ITELS Model Answer: Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the

comtemporary

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contemporary

world, there has been a rapid shift towards consumerism.

Domainance

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Dominance

of marketing famous consumer

products

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are

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reflected by the high sales, not by the actual wants of the

society

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in which they are sold. I fully agree

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this

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notion,

becuase

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because

of the

materislistic

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materialistic

world. One of the key factors of

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the advancements in technology.

Advertisments

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

327 words

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consumer goods
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