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The bar chart below shows expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The bar chart below shows expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
The histogram shows how much France and the UK spent on five consumer goods in 2010.
Overall
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, both countries spent the most
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 cars and the least
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 perfume.
Moreover
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, almost all goods show
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similar
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 behaviour for both countries, with slight differences between them.
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, computers appear to have
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 of around 25,000 pounds sterling.
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, there is a noticeable one in cameras, the UK spent more than
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half of what France did.
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, the given chart
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 illustrates that during the year, British people consumed more books than the French, which suggests that they might read more.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • bar chart
  • comparison
  • categories
  • data points
  • economic status
  • consumer behavior
  • illustrate
  • implications
  • patterns
  • trends
  • notable differences
  • summary
  • reflect
  • insights
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