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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does thistrend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? Wht are the drawbacks?

In recent years, the preference for studying abroad among undergraduates has significantly increased.
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 trend provides opportunities for personal growth and
country
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development
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,
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, domestic institutions may receive less funding and the government may lose skilled workers. One of the main benefits of
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 tendency is that pursuing education in another
country
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 stimulates self-
development
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.
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 is because it allows students to explore new cultures and countries and acquire fundamental knowledge.
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, graduates from international universities often return to their homeland and apply their experience by developing infrastructure or improving medicine in their native
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, thereby contributing to national
development
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.
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, a recent Kazakh graduate returned to Kazakhstan after completing a degree in the United States and
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 infrastructure in two major cities.
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, choosing foreign universities negatively affects local institutions, as fewer individuals allocate funds to their
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.
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 to
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, the majority of students, after graduating abroad, decide to stay in a foreign
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.
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, the
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 loses specialists and human capital, which is an essential part of economic growth and
country
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development
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.
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, a large number of Indian software engineers prefer to choose to work in Canada, contributing to another
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's economy rather than their homeland. In conclusion,
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this
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 trend offers personal growth and national advantages, it may negatively affect
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development
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 of home universities and cause
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a loss
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 of professionals. .

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task achievement
Make sure you clearly state your position in the introduction. Try to express your viewpoint about the extent of benefits more directly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure your paragraphs are well-organized. Start with a clear main idea and support it with examples and details in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more often to connect your ideas, which will make your writing flow better. For example, use words like 'moreover', 'however', and 'in addition'.
task achievement
You provided good examples to support your points, which is excellent for engaging the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion are clear and connect well, giving a good summary of your points.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intercultural competence
  • Globalized workforce
  • Brain drain
  • Adaptation difficulties
  • Cultural shock
  • Professional opportunities
  • Economic benefits
  • Language barriers
  • Social isolation
  • Host country
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