Violence in the media promotes violence in society to what extent do you agree or disagree.

In the
contemperory
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contemporary
world, the
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controversy
surrounding the impact of
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media
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and TV has become a prominent topic. Some
people
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believe that the brutality content shown in the
media
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has a direct influence on the
violence
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occurring in the country. From my perspective, I completely agree with
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point of view.
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,
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the majority
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of elements shown in the
media
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like movies and television programs involve
violence
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and always seem to be entertaining, right and normal to
people
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who are watching them and
this
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will have
greater
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detrimental impact on young
people
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ecspecially
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especially
. The effect will be even
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worse
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if they are watching their favourite celebrity on television.
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is because those famous
people
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become role models for
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the young
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generation and they tend to follow anything done by the character
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portrayed
in the film. Some films do have positivity and great messages,
however
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, most of the time they
are
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negative elements and
violence
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.
Although
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people
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may say the audience can
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the good and leave behind the bad, teenagers often do not always make rational decisions thereby leading them to learn things which make them feel alive and exciting. Not only will they conduct violent
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acts
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towards their family members, but
also
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in schools and public areas.
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, school students may
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in fighting with their fellow classmates
as a result
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of
aggresion
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aggression
and feeling of having everything in their control just as what the
film makers
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show on screen thereby leading to
severe
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a severe
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negative impact on society.
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, in society these days, there are communities who often seek
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attention and
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media
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the media
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has become a motivation for them. Some
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may be
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more susceptible to its influence than others.
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, there are children in families who receive less care and love from their parents and often build up emotions
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because of lack of communication, they find ways to express those feelings,
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which,
most
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cases learnt through
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. The
youngers
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younger
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may imitate the violent
act
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acts
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they see in
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especially if the
violence
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is
potrayed
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portrayed
as realistic and unpunishable.
As a result
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, they become less empathetic and
agression
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aggression
will transform into physical
violence
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
violence
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in the
media
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such
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as TV programs and films
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has
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adverse effects on society
due to
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the fact that
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it
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encourage
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encourages
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people
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to behave aggressively,
as well as
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normalising brutality.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Desensitization
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Imitation
  • Media regulation
  • Cultural context
  • Exposure
  • Social influence
  • Violent imagery
  • Psychological impact
  • Norms and values
  • Media consumption
  • Sensationalism
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