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Some people believe that children should stay at school until 18 years old. However, other people believe they should be allowed to leave school for age of 14. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The argument about
children
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 should stay at school until is
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controversial
 because not all
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children
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 are alike the are different factors that shape
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children
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mentality
,
different
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and different
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that
 make them
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unique
 to others. The
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education
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 system should be more aware
about
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of
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children
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 unqience to others, the
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education
 system should develop different programs to customize the education
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experience
 to produce more suitable
student
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students
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to
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for
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today
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today's
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 era to be
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modern
 and
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 to be prodcutive to the
commuinty
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community
 with more accurate skills that they have and suitable to today needs. in my
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perspective
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 that what we must do to enhance
the
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our
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children
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children's
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eduction
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education
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to
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 modify it and decrease the time to until 16 with the extra 2 years they can
earned
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earn
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 work
expernce
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experience
 through working with companies and interernships to
maxmize
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maximise
 the
benifits
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benefits
 and
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 gaining
guidence
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guidance
 to thier poational feture.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on clear topic sentences for each paragraph. Make sure your ideas connect logically.
task achievement
Provide clear examples to support your opinions. This will make your arguments stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar for clarity. This will help readers understand your points better.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about education changes, which is good for personal voice.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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