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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart displays the residents proportions living in cities around the world
in
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 five different continents.
overall
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, the
numbers
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increaded
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increased
 in all the continents over the time period. The highest increase was in Africa
while
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 the lowest was in North America. In Africa and
Aisa
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Asia
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 the percentage of citizens who lived in urban areas increased to approximately
the
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double in 2015,
whereas
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 in 2050 the
numbers
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 will grow just above half. Latin America witnessed
a
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high growth
numbers
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 as well
were
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where
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 the population
numbers
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 rose from 42% in 1950 to 78% in 2015 and will slightly grow to 84% in 2050. Both Europe and North America had the
least
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lowest
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 growth rate of city residents over
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time. In Europe, the percentage grew from just above half in 1950 to 72% in 2015
then
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 it will grow slowly to 78%. North
Ameriac
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America
 had the lowest proportions among the other continents from 64%
in
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 79%
then
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 87% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Percentage (%)
  • Population
  • Continents
  • Developed vs Developing
  • Growth rate
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Technological factors
  • Infrastructure
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Anomalies
  • Trend
  • Projection
  • Implication
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