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You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: •Remind your employer what the course was about, •Explain why the course was useful to you in your work, •Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ……………., You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to let you know about my recent experience of online certification which
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 achieved with the gold medal. Let me explain the scenario, as our organisation is looking for a senior PLC programmer, I have dreamed of being that since my childhood;
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 had a basic skill of
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 joined Advanced PLC and Robotics program from an online platform to upsurge my knowledge. I already included my other skills in my resume; as
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 was just missing the one requirement to become a Professional engineer which was the certificate I just got, it will not only assist me
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 my wage rise but
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 it was too easy for me, the passing ratio of the education was at the sea-based level with only 5%, as other individuals had no entry-level understanding which was inevitable for joining the event.
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, my office colleagues Do not have enough basic level skills, so
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 am strongly in fever to not recommend
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 will get your response soon in
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 manner. Yours faithfully, Bhaumik Vyas.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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Stay focused on the main points and avoid unrelated details.
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Use a more formal tone in the letter, especially in the opening and closing.
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You clearly mentioned the course you attended and your achievement.
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Your personal experience adds a nice touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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