Some people government spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuse both view and give your opinion.

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see that there
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a lot
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you need to see how the
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causing that trouble, like in our situation here
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traffic congestion . Our issue today has
alot
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a lot
of causes like accidents,roadwork,bad
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weather
,and many more causes that can really harm
people
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,and
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make
them
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frustrated
. To heal our issue we need to see
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the
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and
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of
everyone
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of them.
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start with the train and subway lines,
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a very good
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to solve our
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it will make
people
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go to their decision fast and
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without
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paying
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a lot
of money
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although
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the same
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it
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some concerns like
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crime rate is mostly hight in the subways not all of them but most of them like Newyork City ,
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the
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of trains
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small if there
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many
people
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at the same
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it may
also
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cause
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disease from the
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of
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a good of transportation and
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some downsides but still a very great
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of transporting. On the other side we have
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by our own cars
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the roads
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is an amazing
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of navigation you can go by your car at any
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you
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don't
need to wait for a
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to go anywhere you want , less
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, less crowd and
way
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more efficient .
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it
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some cons like accidents, road
violation
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violations
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by speeding or having a road rage with other drivers can cause many
loses
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we
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don't
want, roadworks can
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cause
people
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to wait for hours when they
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don't
have
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to wait .
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think that going by train is better and much safer , as the research
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the
Universty
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University
Of Oxford says trains are easier and safer just add more security units and bigger subways for all of
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people
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it will make the crowd much less.

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Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. Structure it so your main point is clear from the start.
coherence cohesion
Try to connect your ideas better. Use linking words like 'firstly', 'moreover', and 'in conclusion' to guide the reader through your points.
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For your examples, avoid general statements. Try to give specific instances or statistics that support your points better.
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Check your spelling and grammar. For example, 'proplem' should be 'problem' and 'wich' should be 'which'.
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You provide a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument.
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Your consideration of the pros and cons of both transportation methods shows critical thinking.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • congestion relief
  • environmental sustainability
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure development
  • long-term solution
  • commute times
  • urban planning
  • traffic flow
  • efficiency and punctuality
  • investment returns
  • car usage
  • traffic management
  • community impact
  • natural habitats
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