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Band 3.5

People are increasingly getting married later in life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

In later years , studies show that many individuals
keen
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 to take a long period of time to get married.
This
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on
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 the positives and the negatives of
this
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 phenomenon. On
one
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 hand , there is a bright side
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 being single until 38-40 , Being sole means that you are responsible for only yourself , you do not have
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 fret over
any one
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 else .
furthermore
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 , you can set the lights for your own future and focus on
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,
for instance
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 , I got my
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 when I was
a
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single
due to
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 the free time I
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.
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 , the drawbacks of
this
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 course are enormous I believe , marriage is a sacred bond and is the only way to produce communities by creating more and more children, and taking too long to get married is obviously one way to bury that idea ,
not to mention
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 the
loneless
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loneliness
 you feel as you getting older each year . To illustrate , being lonely kills you over time and many stories cement
this
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 point of view.
To conclude
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 , you have to pick what suits
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 , I
demonestrate
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demonstrate
 both views , so choose
wisley
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wisely
.
weither
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Whether
 you want to be alone when you are 60 years old or 60 with sons and
duaghters
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daughters
 and maybe
grand children
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grandchildren
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 around you .

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Task Response
Make sure your introduction clearly states the topic and gives a brief overview of the main points you will discuss in the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to group your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea that is easy to understand.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use better linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, use 'for example', 'in addition', and 'however' to show relationships between points.
Task Response
In your conclusion, summarize your main points clearly and restate your opinion about the topic to make it stronger.
Task Achievement
You provided both advantages and disadvantages, which shows you understand the topic well.
Task Achievement
You included personal experience, which adds depth to your argument and makes it relatable.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal freedom
  • financial independence
  • personal growth
  • societal perceptions
  • emotional support
  • social connectivity
  • mental health
  • long-term security
  • compromise
  • flexibility
  • self-esteem
  • isolation
  • stigma
  • hobbies and interests
  • time and energy
  • build a broader network
  • pursuing further education
  • allocate their money
  • career-related decisions
  • liberty
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