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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You recently attended a training course for your work. Your employer has asked you for your feedback on the training course. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: •Remind your employer what the course was about, •Explain why the course was useful to you in your work, •Suggest why the course may not be suitable for some of your other colleagues. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ……………., You get 20 minutes to complete this task.

Dear Sir or Madam, I
work
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 as an
aeroneticl
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aeronautical
 engineer with Sudan Airways in the maintenance department, and recently we attended a safety and security
course
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 that was held on 17th October 2025 in the main hall. I am writing to give
me
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you
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 some feedback on the
course
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's first impressions.
Firstly
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, the
course
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 focused on important aspects of the dialysis routine that all employees must be aware of,
for instance
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, safety in the
work
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 environment, and how to use safety equipment if you
work
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 in a hazardous zone.
Moreover
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, how to use a
fire
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 extinguisher
with
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for
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 different types of
fire
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, like oil
fire
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 and electrical
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fire
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fires
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. There is one type
that is
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 suitable for.
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,
this
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course
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 is more helpful and important to teach for all employees because it
learn
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teaches
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 you the essential roles to deal with
fire
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 if it happens during
work
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 most of the big aviation companies are highly recommended to attend
this
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course
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, like Airbus, Boeing, and Delta
airlines
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Airlines
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.
In addition
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,
this
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course
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 might not be suitable for those who have suffered a heart attack,
high
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or high
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 blood pressure, it is difficult for them to carry heavy items like firefighters alone without outside help. Thanks for your attention to
this
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 matter. Your Faithfully, Aamir.

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task achievement
Make sure to develop your ideas with more details.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear ideas in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the greeting and closing to match a formal tone.
task achievement
You addressed the course topic and purpose well.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear structure and flow.
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