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Band 5.5

You are going to study in a college in the UK next year. You would like to stay in a college Hall of Residence. Write a letter to the college. In your letter explain your accommodation requirements explain what your food needs are ask what alternatives are available if they cannot provide what you want You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir I'm writing to you regarding my accommodation in
Hall
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the Hall
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 of Residence next year, with some requirements and more specific
informations
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information
pieces of information
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. I would like to start with room preference , If available , I prefer a single room with no roommate , a small desk and of course a private bathroom , I am not strict when it comes to floors, but the 3rd floor would be helpful , because there is no much noise on the weekends. when it comes to food , I am not allergic to any type of food so everything is eatable for me .
Although
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 I do not prefer fish
but
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apply
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if it is on the menu and no alternatives I would be fine. If you can not provide all of the requests I mentioned above , please let me know about alternatives if you have one and we can discuss it later . looking forward
hearing
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to hearing
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 from you soon . John

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coherence and cohesion
Try to use clearer paragraphs for each topic, so ideas are easy to follow.
task achievement
Make sure to use a friendly and polite tone throughout the letter for better response.
task achievement
The letter talks about room and food needs clearly, showing good understanding of the task.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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