Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. You should Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In
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day and age, technology has driven globalization which leads to
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culture
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immersion.
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many people think that
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will bring about
single
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a single
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world
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culture
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, I completely disagree with the view above.
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essay will discuss more about the opinion stated. First and foremost,
technology-driven
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a technology-driven
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world
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is leading to global
intergration
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integration
. It is possible that many unique
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culture
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cultures
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from Asian and African countries are being forgotten as teenagers are adopting more and more Western
culture
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, which will ultimately
leads
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to
culture
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being
dilluted
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diluted
.
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, there are organizations dedicated to preserving cultures.
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the influence of internationalization means that many countries are interdependent on each other,
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can offer long-term opportunities for
coporations
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corporations
looking to
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unique traditions from disappearing
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as effective collaboration, more funding and increasing the chance of propagating people to protect their
culture
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.
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, AI
also
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become the main part
in
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preventing the
single
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single-world
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world
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culture
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effect. As AI is learning faster and more
efficient
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than even human beings, AI will develop its intellectual property and creativity. Admittedly, AI may apprehend the problem that we must face and they will come up with realistic solutions to deal with the issues.
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, other individuals will lend a hand to save cultures from combining into one. In conclusion, technology
intergrating
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integrating
in
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our
world
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won't create a society that results in global monoculture.
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, we will see that everybody will try to prevent it.

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coherence
Make sure to clearly state your main points in topic sentences for each paragraph. This helps the reader understand your argument better.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points. Instead of mentioning organizations, mention specific ones. This strengthens your argument.
language
Check for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'intergration' instead of 'integration' and 'dilluted' instead of 'diluted'. These small errors can confuse the reader.
task achievement
You have a clear viewpoint on the topic, which is important for a strong essay.
task achievement
Your idea about AI's role in preserving culture is interesting and relevant.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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