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Write a letter to the college director requesting to change your course. You should include details about: - what course are you doing now - why you are not satisfied with that course -what course you would like to change to.

Dear Terry Bennet, I am Ashunkumar Patel, currently a
third week
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 student
of
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 the University of Windsor enrolled for
Master
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a Master
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 of Business Intelligence. I am writing
this
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 letter
for
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 a concern regarding the course enrolled in.
As my
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 graduation is completed thoroughly from
Information
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 Technology field
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 includes the key concepts like coding for the front-end and back-end, database connections, and networking. The course that I am currently in
,
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 strictly belongs to analysis
that is
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 relevant to business models which contradicts
as well as
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 there is no basic understanding regarding business models
that is
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 taught in
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 semester as there are several to come
upcoming
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in upcoming
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 semesters. Thereby, I request to change my program
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to
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Masters
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the Masters
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 of Applied Computing(MAC), as the modules and structure
that
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is
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 followed
is
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 purely relevant to the studies that I have
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 in past.
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, I have taken the consideration only after approaching and attending the meeting with professors of the MAC department, as their statement was I perfectly fit into the program. I appreciate your swift handling of
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 problem, and look forward
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 consideration from you. Regards, Ashun Patel

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coherence
Make sure each paragraph focuses on one main idea clearly.
coherence
Try to use clear and simple sentences to express your thoughts better.
task
Include more details about why you want to change your course.
task
Check your opening and closing statements for politeness and clarity.
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You clearly stated your current course and the new course you want.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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