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There are many environmental problems, such as the greenhouse effect and climate change, and people have hardly found any solutions. Why is this the case? And what measures can be taken?

Nowadays,there are more and more problems
of
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in
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environment
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the environment
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 and
it
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they
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 have a huge influence on
people’
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people
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s
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's
life
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 and our earth. These problems are caused by many reasons. In my opinion, it should be solved by every country and
evey
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every
 person. The development of
techonology
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technology
 is getting faster, so we can see more and cars are
drived
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driven
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 on the streets. They emit amounts of bad gas when we
enjoying
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comfortable
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drving
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driving
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environment
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environments
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,
such
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 as co2. All of these bad gas
are
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 the main reason for
claimate
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climate
 change and greenhouse.
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 the
increasing
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increase
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 of building land, there are
less
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fewer
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 woods that could produce
oxyen
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oxygen
 for citizens, so the weather is getting
wireder
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.
Also
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, residents
in
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this
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 earth
using
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use
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 too much
woods
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wood
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 and the growing rate of
forest
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forests
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 is not enough faster than the rate of
cuting
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cutting
. It’s clear that the government should make some policies to
protectt
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protect
 the
environment
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 and prevent
the
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apply
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unreasonable actions,
such
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 as cutting too
much
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many
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 trees, throwing rubbish
cacually
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actually
casually
 and so on.
While
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 punishing the citizens who destroy the living
environment
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 and
natrual
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natural
montaint
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mountain
mountains
 and river. In the meanwhile,
community
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the community
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 can pronounce different news by social media and
sticking
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 paper on the wall. It would let more people know why we should protect the
environment
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 and how should we do that.
Fortrunately
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Fortunately
, there are some non-profit
oganization
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organisations
 to help animals who can’t find
habitat
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a habitat
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 and
lacking
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source
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a source
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 of food. Everyone
of
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this
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 society should support them no matter donating money
and
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or
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 attending
to
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apply
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thhese
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these
organization
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organizations
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. It is important
that
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to
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educating
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educate
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 children to love nature and their lands in school. Children
is
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are
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 the biggest hope of the earth in the
furture
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future
, if we want to develop for a long period, it’s necessary
teaching
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to teach
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 students the importance of
protecting
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protection
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 and green
developing
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development
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. In conclusion, it is important that every country should combine with each other and try their best to protect
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environment
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the environment
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraphs for each main idea. This way, your essay will be easier to read and follow.
coherence and cohesion
Check for spelling and grammar mistakes to improve clarity, so readers can easily understand your points.
task achievement
You have identified important environmental problems and suggested some possible solutions, which is good.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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