Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be. Others say that people only continue their education because the opportunities exist for them to do so. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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in your local newspaper about the city where I live,
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. The
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is very informative.
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some wrong information being written which I would like to draw your attention
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Irbid
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is the city where I was born and raised and I am still living there
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with my family. It is a small city in the northern of Jordan.
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the weather is very nice in spring, fall and summer, it could be extremely cold in winter.
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, it was mentioned that the main agricultural product in
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is corn.
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planting corn, the main product is olive as 80% of the lands in the area are planted with olive trees. Actually, it is the main source of income for most of
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there. I would kindly request
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and post it again in the next
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mistake. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Wafa Alawneh

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
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The letter has a clear purpose and addresses the issue being discussed.
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The writer gives specific details about the city Irbid, which adds personal touch.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • qualifications
  • job market
  • competition
  • educational opportunities
  • higher education
  • scholarships
  • online courses
  • socio-economic background
  • lifelong learning
  • personal growth
  • technological advancements
  • learning landscape
  • digital resources
  • innovative ways
  • motivating further education
  • workforce
  • dynamic job market
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