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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look afterredevelopment next year.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plan shows the airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year.
THe
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The
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 most noticeable change is that a coffee and an ATM will appear in the arrival zone where there used to be an empty lounge before the renovation, and after it there is a car hire
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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 made next to
this
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 area. A bag drop appeared in the departure area, and the check-in and coffee were moved to another location. And after passport control shops appeared.
Also
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, after passport control, the number of gates in the boarding zone has increased and people can get from one to
other
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another
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 by sky train when previously it was only possible on foot

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introduction/conclusion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion. This helps to frame your response for the reader.
cohesion
Use linking words like 'firstly,' 'next,' and 'finally' to show the order of information and improve flow.
task achievement
Include more specific comparisons between the two plans to deepen your analysis.
positive
You identified some key changes in the airport layout, which is a good start to the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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