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The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2015 to 2035. Production of Grains (2015–2035) Grain20152020202520302035 Wheat100105107108110 Barley50708090100 Maize3434.534.53535 Rice24.724.324.52525.5 The quantities shown are in million metric tons.

The chart below gives information about the production of grains, measured in million metric tons, from the years 2015 to 2035. Production of Grains (2015–2035) Grain20152020202520302035 Wheat100105107108110 Barley50708090100 Maize3434.534.53535 Rice24.724.324.52525.5 The quantities shown are in million metric tons.
The table depicts information about grain
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 from 2010 and
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 its prediction for 2030. The units are measured in
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 metric tons.
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, it is projected that wheat and barley will be the most produced type of grains in 2030,
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maize
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 and rice will be the least produced. Meanwhile, the amount of
maize
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 grown in 2015, 2020, and 2025 were the same.
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, a similar amount of
maize
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 is predicted to be cultivated in 2030.
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, the amount of wheat produced between 2010 and 2025
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 slightly under 100
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 metric
tonnes
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 and its
production
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 levels will increase to 110
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 2030.
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, from 2010 to 2025, barley was produced in 50, 70, 80, and 90
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 metric
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 respectively and its projected to be exactly 100
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 in 2030.
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maize
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 had a lower
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 level with 34, 34.5,34.5 and 35
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 2010, 2015, 2020, and 2025, its
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 levels will remain at 35
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 metric
tonnes
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 in 2030.
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, between 2010 and 2020 rice was minimally produced. Its cultivation levels were all within the range of 24 and 25
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tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, million, maize, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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