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The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about how much people in the United States and the United Kingdom spend on petrol. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the expenditure on
fuel
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 by the residents of the United States(US)and the United Kingdom (UK).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
people
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 who earned less than average
income
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 spent the highest amount of money on petrol in the US
whereas
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 , in the UK, the richer households depleted a considerable part of their earnings in getting
fuel
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. In the UK, the spending of poor families on accessing
fuel
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 for vehicles and for agricultural purposes was less than one per cent
while
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 the investment in
fuel
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 increased with the increase in the level of
income
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 for the
people
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 accounting for spending by middle-class individuals between 2.5 per cent to 4 per cent.
On the other hand
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, the popular residents who earned more spent a similar amount of their earnings which was equivalent to average
income
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people
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. In the US, a substantial proportion of the savings is distributed to petrol by poor
people
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while
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 the percentage declined to move from middle-class families to rich
people
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.
However
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, some of the middle-
income
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people
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 spent an equivalent proportion of their
income
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 on
fuel
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 in both nations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fuel, people, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • disparities
  • evolved
  • fluctuations
  • stabilization
  • significant gap
  • trends
  • economic conditions
  • vehicular technology
  • public transportation
  • summarise
  • comparison
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