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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates anticipations about the information of
industry
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devote
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devoted
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 to India’s total revenue product between 1960 and 2000
Overall
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,
Agriculture
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 always holds the highest position
in
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at
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 the beginning of the survey, but in the
last
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year
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 was much lower than íts beginning.
Service
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The service
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industry
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 tends to be
in contrast
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 to
Agriculture
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that
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which
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 has increased steadily over the
years
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, to the final ten
years
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 of surpassing both the remaining in others.
While
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Industry
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 fluctuated slightly in the first two
years
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 and kept stable until 2000.
Agriculture
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 accounted for more than 60% in 1960, Service
also
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 had that similarity but reached the peak in 2000. From 1960 to 1970
Agriculture
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 had a sharp decline to only more than 50%, continuously decreasing in the following
years
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 and about 12%.
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, the Service started to be almost lower than nearly 18%.
Nevertheless
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, it was constantly going up, and there was a clear difference between the first
year
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 and the final
year
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 of 42%.
Industry
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 in the first
year
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 only reached 18%.
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However
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 it rose slightly to the range
25
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of 25
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% between 1970 and 1980. And maintain at a stable of 25% to 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industry, agriculture, year, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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