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Topic: Computers are being used more and more in education and some say there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people
believed
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that is
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teachers
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by
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 computers in the education system, and that leads to
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teachers
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 disappearance. Personally, I believe that students need
teachers
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 to teach them,
due to
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 the importance of
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 interaction and to tackle the digital
issues
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that
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is
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 still under exam.
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 with,
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teachers
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 attendance is crucial for the teaching system and student understanding.
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, students need to interact with their
teachers
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 to ask questions and improve their soft
skills
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,
such
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 as leadership, communication and teamwork, and that cannot be achieved without a monitor who can control the class.
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,
also
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 they can gain these
skills
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 by observing the lecturer’s behaviours.
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, studies have shown that schools
who
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relay
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rely
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 on studying online metode are less likely to participate
on
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 competitions that
required
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 personal
skills
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 like sports compared to traditional schools. Another point to consider is that many electronic devices have
issues
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 that make corporating them in schools or universities under study. It is
also
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 possible to say that
issues
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 like poor internet can be challenging to solve and need a large outcome which
is
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can be hard to afford.
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, just
few
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 big companies like
,
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 Apple and Sony can afford a strong internet that can serve many computers in one place. In conclusion,
although
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 technology has changed the world and
play
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 a vital role in education progress,
the
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teachers
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 cannot be replaced by devices. I firmly believe that students should learn from
humanbeing
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human beings
 to maintain their human
skills
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 and avoid
the
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acadamic
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academic
delay
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 because of
the
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online learning
issues
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and stick to it. This will help your readers follow your points better.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to support your ideas. For example, mention a real-life situation where teachers made a difference in student learning.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use simpler sentences to make your ideas clearer. Sometimes, complicated sentences can confuse the reader.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic, and you provide reasons for your viewpoint.
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