1.You recently discovered that there are plans to construct an airport in your locality. Write a letter to the local authority. In your letter, you should tell: •explain how you knew about the plans •describe the negative effect of the construction on your neighbourhood •suggest a possible solution to the problem.

Dear Sir/ Madam, I am writing to complain about an airport in your locality
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since the matter requires immediate attention.
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the plans, I knew about the plans from our relatives. Not only has
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caused significant inconvenience, but it
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disrupted our society.
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, I noticed the negative effects of the
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on our neighbourhood, which may have caused environmental degradation.
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, I have tried contacting your customer service team by phone and email over the past week, but no one has responded. Rather than prolonging the issue, I suggest you either
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an airport away from our society.
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I had high expectations from your authority,
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experience has been disappointing. I kindly request you to resolve
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matter promptly. Thank you for your attention. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Adam

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task response
Make sure you explain how you found out about the airport clearly.
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Add more details about the negative effects on your community.
coherence cohesion
Use clearer transitions between your ideas for better flow.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has one main idea to improve focus.
writing tone
Your letter has a polite tone throughout.
task response
You clearly state your request for a solution, which is good.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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