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Some people say history is one of the most important subjects in schools .other people think that in today’s world subjects science and Technology are more important than history Discuss both this views and give your own opinion

In recent years, some individuals think that one of the most important
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 in schools is history,
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 others think it is
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 and
technology
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.
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 both subjects play a significant role in shaping
students
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' knowledge and perspective, the debate continues over which should be prioritized in modern curriculum. Some people argue that history is one
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 most important subjects because it helps
students
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 understand the past, learn from previous mistakes, and develop a sense of identity and culture. By studying historical events and figures,
students
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 gain insight into how societies have evolved, which can guide better decision-making in the present and future.
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, others believe that
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 and
technology
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 are more important in today's world. With rapid development in areas
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 as medicine, communication, and environmental solutions,
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understanding
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 and
technology
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 equips
students
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 with practical skills and knowledge that are crucial for modern life and careers. In my opinion, both subjects are valuable, but
science
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 and
technology
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 should be
priorized
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prioritised
 in the school curriculum because they prepare
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 to solve current global challenges and contribute to innovation.
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, history should still be taught to ensure
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 remain aware of
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their
 roots and
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 background.

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Make sure each paragraph starts with a clear topic sentence that tells the main idea.
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Check for grammar and spelling errors, like 'undestanding' should be 'understanding' and 'thei' should be 'their'.
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You present both sides of the argument well, showing that you understand the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your opinion is clear in the conclusion, which helps the reader know your stance.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • cultural awareness
  • social, economic, and political developments
  • critical thinking
  • analytical skills
  • innovation
  • economic development
  • practical skills
  • problem-solving
  • current global issues
  • climate change
  • healthcare
  • technological fluency
  • digital literacy
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