Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art which helps to develop quality in people’s life. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

Many governments invest in providing
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to their citizens, which contributes to culture and quality of life.
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, priority should be given to funding other areas. I largely share
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assessment. Many governments and states tend to spend exaggerated amounts of money on second or third necessity items,
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of poor gestion and lack of assertiveness. As money is not unlimited, the most important needs must be prioritized, and
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is not one of them. Food, health, and education are important areas that need to be addressed and funded more urgently, and,
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everyone would have access to them
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because they're crucial for
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's survival and development.
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a study, that talks about the pyramid of human needs, a person without health and housing will never value
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nor be able to appreciate it. Investing in shelters, public schools and hospitals
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has a real impact on the quality of life of the
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who need it most.
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, a study from the University of California
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indicated that governments that invest more in health, education, and housing, have happier citizens and a significant decrease in crime. In conclusion,
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contributes to
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's quality of life in all its forms, investing in areas that directly affect
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's well-being, should always be a central priority, especially those that have to do with humanitarian and survival issues

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • economic stimulation
  • job creation
  • local businesses
  • art education
  • creativity
  • critical thinking
  • public art
  • urban beautification
  • mental health
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • investing in art
  • community pride
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