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The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for four different mobiles ( cellphones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.

The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for four different mobiles ( cellphones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euro.
This
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 chart illustrates the contact rate for four
verious
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various
 cellphones
in
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on
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 average from
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the begining
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begining
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beginning
 of the year to
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september
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September
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 month for
2002
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the 2002
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 year in
euro
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the euro
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 currency.
Overall
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, all four countries have fluctuating
rates
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 from
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january
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January
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 to
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september
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September
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 2022. Where Deme has the highest rate starting from 15
euros
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 to ending with around 25
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, and reaches at top most at 25
euro
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euros
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 in
july
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July
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.
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, Alpha has
same
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the same
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fuluctuating
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fluctuating
 trend starting from below
as
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apply
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5
euros
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 and
and
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apply
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finishes at
highest
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its highest
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 in
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september
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September
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 month at 25 euro.
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 with, in
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january
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January
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 Lex and Slim Tx prices
starts
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with
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at
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, around 10
euros
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 and both
having
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have
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 fluctuating
rates
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 but Slim tx
rates
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starts
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start
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sudden
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suddenly
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 decrease
from
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in
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june
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June
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 and end
with
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at
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 below 10 in
november
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November
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,
while
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rates
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 in Lex surge
from
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in
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june
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June
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 and
finishes
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finish
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 at nearly 15
euros
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 per month.
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, Dame has
rates
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starts
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starting
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with
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at
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 15
euros
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 in
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january
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January
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 and
has
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apply
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fluctuating
rates
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 until
april
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April
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 and
then
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start
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starts
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raising
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rising
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 and
finishes
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finishing
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 at
nerly
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nearly
 25
euros
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.
Furthermore
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, Alpha has
lowest
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the lowest
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rates
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 amongst all other nations in
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january
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January
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 and fluctuate till
jun
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then
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start
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starts
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 increasing dramatically and
end
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ends
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 with
most
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the most
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 expensive
as
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at
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 25
euros
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 in
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september
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September
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 2002. On other hand

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Vocabulary: Replace the words september, rates, january, euros with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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