IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is deemed that
tourist
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tourists
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 get more advantages from taking a tour
local
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locally
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 than
in
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abroad. I completely agree with
this
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 statement, because it
allow
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allows
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 to increase the economy of
nation
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the nation
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as well as
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tourist
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tourists
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 feel safe and secure. To commence with, if someone
go
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goes
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 to another country to see attractive places, it is normal one can not only spend some money to purchase
the
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apply
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things but
also
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 for
accomodation
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accommodation
. Tourist
usally
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usually
 want to make more memories for
that
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apply
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they buy
the
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apply
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local items and bring
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them in
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in
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to
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 their home country.
Although
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, it could be less expensive for them,
local
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the local
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 market in their own nation
effect
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 in
negative
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 way. SBBSU University,
for instance
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, revealed that individual who go to other countries for any reason, majority of them buy spend
atleast
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at least
 one month of their salary.
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,
traving
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travelling
 in other countries
reduce
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reduces
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 the tax in local
nation
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nations
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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, individuals know about their local country people and their behaviour. They are familiar with all the rules
as well as
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 regulations.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to have clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
task achievement
Elaborate more on your points. Add more examples or details to support your ideas.
language use
Check grammar and spelling. Make sure your sentences are correct and the words are spelled right.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion on the topic and you express your agreement well.
content
You mentioned safety and familiarity with local customs, which are good points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exploration
  • cultural heritage
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • familiarity
  • carbon footprint
  • tourist attractions
  • local economies
  • sustainability
  • engagement
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