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The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.

The table below shows the estimated literacy rates by region and gender for 2000-2004.
The table presents the projected
literacy
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rates
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 across five regions and worldwide from 2000 to 2004.
Overall
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, Europe made up the majority of the total
literacy
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rates
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while
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 Africa recorded the smallest share.
In addition
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, the
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 of females was lower than that of males in all regions
as well as
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 globally. In terms of the global average, the total
percentage
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 of people who were able to read and write
recorded
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82.2
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at 82.2
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%, accounting for male
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rates
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 at 87.2% and female
literacy
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rates
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 at 77.3%. Europe
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 the largest proportion
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 global
literacy
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rates
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, exceeding 98% in total, with around 99% for men, which is around 0.7
percentage
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 points higher than female
literacy
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rates
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This
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 was followed by the Americas and Oceania, both of which had similar total
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 at around 93%, with the Americas being slightly higher. Notably, the share of males in these two regions
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also
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 nearly identical, at 94.1% and 94.2%, respectively.
On the other hand
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, the proportion of men’s
literacy
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 in Asia accounted for approximately 13
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 points higher than that of women, resulting
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total
literacy
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 rate of 79.3%. Meanwhile, Africa experienced the lowest figures
overall
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, with 71.6% for men and 53.9% for women, presenting the least significant contributor of 62.5% in total.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words literacy, rates, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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