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The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mein features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart show the reasons for immigrants to a European country in 2009 and reasons for immigrants from a European country in 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mein features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts illustrate the reasons for immigration to and from a European
country
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 in 2009.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the most common
reason
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 for
people
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 leaving the
country
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 was to get a definite
job
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, accounting for over one-third of the total. Meanwhile, the main
reason
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 for
people
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 moving to the
country
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 was to accompany family, followed by definite
job
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 opportunities. In detail, 38% of
people
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 who emigrated from the European
country
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 did so because they had a definite
job
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, making
this
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 the largest proportion. The second most common
reason
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 was “other reasons” at 23%, followed by accompanying family (15%), looking for a
job
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 (13%), studying (7%), and
finally
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, 4% left for no specific
reason
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. As for immigration to the
country
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, 25% of
people
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 moved to accompany family members,
while
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 23% came because they had a definite
job
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.
Additionally
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, 18% arrived to look for work, 15% for study, 15% for other reasons, and 7% for no particular
reason
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. In conclusion, definite jobs and family reasons were the main factors influencing immigration flows in both directions.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, reason, people, job with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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