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The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year

The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should How the Unemployed Spend their Time, UK, last year
This
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 table shows how men and women spent their time
last
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 year
due to
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unemplyment
Correct your spelling
unemployment
.Time is expressed in percentage and there is
also
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 a distinction between morning and afternoon activities Housework was the most common activity for both women and men,but it is evident that in the afternoon the percentage of women that do
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 activity is much
more
Change the word
apply
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higher than
man
Fix the agreement mistake
men
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.
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Instead
Add a comma
Instead,
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 a big difference
of
Change preposition
in
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 percentage between morning and afternoon is about staying in bed.Drinking was not a very popular activity.In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 the top three activities that are the most common are Housework,Shopping and Job hunting.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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