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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses, so people can choose to build houses in their own styles instead of building them with the same style as the old houses in the local area. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's world in many places, there is
increasing
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 tendency to build a house in personal test and
decorating
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 it on own design. Some believe that it makes
worse
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the
overall
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 overview of the city,
while
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other
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 that it gives a freedom of creativity. I personally think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages
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colourful
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 and awful
view
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 of the city. One of the main drawbacks is that decorating houses
on
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 personal style will create disorder in the streets
,
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 since each individual has a personal taste and
view
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 of decoration.
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, the construction place will look strange and unpleasant for the majority of residents.
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,
this
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 trend may create some difficulties with policy, as it would be a frequent disagreement.
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, the individual is able to construct a
strong
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shape dwelling that will interrupt other
resident's
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life
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lives
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 and after
neighbours
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neighbours'
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 complaints would have problems with the policy.
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, building a house with a personal
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 may develop the critical thinking and imagination of the individual. Creating something from a personal
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 offers an opportunity to improve
art
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 and build skills that are truly important these days.
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, residents are able to create a tourist attraction and invite more people to attend their country.
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, in Chaica residents decorated their oven flats and
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 attracted more tourists to visit Gankong.
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,
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 decorating houses to personal taste can develop creative skills and attract tourists to the country it leads to significant disorder on the streets and
create
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 disagreement between neighbours.

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Make sure your main points are clear and supported by more examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence
Try to improve the flow of your ideas by using linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally'.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and that your conclusion summarizes what you've discussed.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, which is good for task response.
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Your examples are relevant, and they help to support your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • architectural diversity
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • culturally enriching
  • cityscape
  • vibrant
  • personal expression
  • homeowner satisfaction
  • sense of ownership
  • economic opportunities
  • landmarks
  • cohesion
  • visual discord
  • aesthetic balance
  • property values
  • structural integrity
  • building codes
  • eco-friendly
  • sustainable building techniques
  • energy-efficient
  • environmental impact
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