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Nowadays, the quality of education is very low. some people think that we think that we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticize their teachers; others believe that this would result in a loss of respect of discipline in the classroom. Disscuss both views and give your opinion..

It is often argued that
students
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 should evaluate and take the role of their
teachers
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,
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 others seem to believe that in doing so,
respect
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of
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discipline
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 between a
teacher
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 and their
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 would be lost. I firmly believe that there are other methods
students
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 can follow without disrespecting their tutors or anyone else.
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, some individuals believe that allowing
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 to criticize their
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 or evaluate them is a sign
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 a loss of
respect
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of
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discipline
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. To illustrate,
students
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 can learn about evaluation in a more respectful manner by evaluating themselves whilst doing certain tasks provided by their tutors or grading themselves on an assignment that was given to them by their fellow
teachers
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.
Morever
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, showing that an environment of
respect
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 between a
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 and their
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 is present.
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, others have the belief that
teachers
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 should permit their
students
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 to criticize and evaluate them.
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, a student criticizing or commenting on their
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's strategy of learning,
behavior
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, or character in a disrespectful manner which in my opinion, is
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 of
discipline
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.
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,
while
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 some people believe that having a student criticize and evaluate their
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become
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 tolerated, others disagree and believe that
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of
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discipline
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 should not be lost, which I believe is the right thing to do.

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task achievement
Your main argument is not clearly stated. Make sure to express your opinion clearly in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use clear topic sentences for each paragraph. This helps guide the reader through your ideas.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. This will make your arguments stronger.
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Your writing shows good awareness of different viewpoints.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is good with an introduction, body, and conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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