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With the rise in popularity of the Internet, newspapers will soon become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Since technology has been advancing to an extent, newspapers will only be a piece of paper in history. Technology has a variety of inventions,
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 as the net itself. Wherein, a bunch of report articles and tabloids are posted on
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different platforms which is
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 one of the reasons why the majority of people are kind of neglecting
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. Some people even reduced the usage of television where they usually stream news reports back in the day because they prefer to witness the public reports on their phones since they find it pretty convenient. I agree that
magazine
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 will be gone in the future because they are being overshadowed by phones and
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, and in terms of several types of information, the
internet
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 will be the best thing a person can ever choose
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 of a paper flowing with reports which
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 sometimes not credible.
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 in the other hand, everyone can explore more and deeper on the net about the things they are curious about with using Google, and in just one click, various articles will show up on the screen of your phone. In conclusion, it is possible that
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 will play a big role in the absence of
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 in the near future.

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You have a clear opinion on the topic and support it with reasons.
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Your conclusion summarizes your point of view well.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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