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The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.

The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over six months in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons here relevant.
The line chart illustrates key
information
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 during 2011, receiving the value from tourists about
information
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 place in one city up six months. The units are measured in numbers.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that all the three pieces of
information
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was
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 increasing except those who called by letter or email.
In addition
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, the office
inquiries
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 received in person were the highest value in June,
whereas
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 at the same time, the lowest amount was in the library
inquiries
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 received by letter or email.
According to
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 what is shown the people who
inquiries
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 received in human to tourist
Information
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 Office started with an incredible jump in the first month was 400 but after 5 months it becomes nearly 2000. In terms of the people
who
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whose
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inquiries
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received
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were received
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 by passing or
gmail
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Gmail
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 to tourist message service began a significant
declined
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 to the end of June.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words information, inquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 4 times.
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