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The graph below provides the amount of books which were borrowed in four various months in 2014 from four village libraries, with the pie chart indicating the proportion of books that were borrowed over this period.

The graph below provides the amount of books which were borrowed in four various months in 2014 from four village libraries, with the pie chart indicating the proportion of books that were borrowed over this period.
The line graph illustrates the quantity of
books
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 borrowed by four
libraries
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 in remote areas in four months in 2014
whereas
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 the pie chart demonstrates the percentage of variety of
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 that were borrowed by the
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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a
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 maximum number of
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 taken by the librarians of all the villages fluctuated throughout the period
while
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 the majority of the
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 constituted
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fiction
books
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. In June, the number of
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 that the librarians of West Eaton and Church Mount gathered to display was 50.
In contrast
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, the collection of reading material in these
libraries
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 increased till September was equivalent, accounting for 150
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.
Additionally
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, the
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 of Ryeslip and Sutton Wood borrowed 250 and 350
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 in the initial month, respectively.
However
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, the number of
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 in Ryeslip library declined dramatically over the months and resulted in around a collection of 160
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 in the
last
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 month.
On the other hand
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, the trend of borrowing
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 in Sutton Wood rose slightly till July followed by a considerable decrease in the trend to 100 in August and again drastically climbed to 300 in September. In
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 of types of
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, 43 per cent of the total
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 comprised
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fiction
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 and 19 per cent of the
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 explained history.
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, the proportion of science and biography content made up 14 per cent of the stock and only one-tenth of the
books
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 were for self-help.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, libraries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • borrow
  • books
  • month
  • village
  • libraries
  • amount
  • proportion
  • new
  • year
  • people
  • reading
  • number
  • activities
  • increase
  • decrease
  • enjoy
  • weather
  • family
  • time
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