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The chart below shows the diffrent levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the propotion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make write least to 150 word.

The chart below shows the diffrent levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the propotion of men and women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make write least to 150 word.
The bar graph illustrates the variety of options of education available to students on the completion of their school in Australia and the percentage of males and females who pursued them in 1999.
Overall
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, it is evident that the majority of men enrolled in post-school qualifications in comparison to women
whereas
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 a higher proportion of people were interested in the skilled vocational
diploma
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 among other options. In terms of getting a Masters Degree and Postgraduate
Diploma
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, the percentage of girls and boys who study these courses were 40 per
cent
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 and 60 per
cent
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 for the former, and 30 per
cent
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 and 70 per
cent
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 for the latter.
In contrast
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, a significant proportion of both genders studied for Bachelor's Degrees with minor variations of around 5 per
cent
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.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of males and females who qualified with an Undergraduate
Diploma
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 accounted for approximately 35 per
cent
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 and 70 per
cent
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, respectively.
Moreover
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, the prominent course among men was Skilled Vocational
Diploma
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 representing 90 per
cent
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 of the total male enrollers.
However
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, the remaining seats of the course were occupied by women.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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