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Band 4

Public transport should be funded by the government so it can be free for people who use it.

Public
transport
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 should be funded by the government so it can be free for
people
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 who
use
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 it. Agree or disagree There is a view that natural sites
of
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for
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 using public
transport
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 should be capitalized and paid
by
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for by
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 the state to encourage
people
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 to
use
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 a communal route.
While
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 urban
transport
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 must be maintained with
fee
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a fee
the fee
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, I believe that whenever fee offers several advantages in routes, I strongly argue that it captures
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drivers
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drivers'
driver's
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 salaries and their
respects
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. On the one hand, constant growth in the world’s public
transportation
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 requires several advantages
firstly
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, there are
declining
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of
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in
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users
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users'
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 communal conveyances for some reason, to find a solution
it
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apply
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can be
variety
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a variety
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 of organizations should be organized,
such
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 as
win free
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win-free
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 public
transport
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 cards from fun activities from that will be easy to encourage
people
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 to
use
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 a public
transport
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, even disabled and elderly
people
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 should participate in
such
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 interesting activities and they should
also
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use
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 free
transportation
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.
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Moreover
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 If
people
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 start using
transportation
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, traffic will decrease dramatically. even not using communal routes offers several advantages for
people
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, that’s apparent Free and subsidized
transportation
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 brings great benefits to
people
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 and each other.
On the other hand
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, there are many disadvantages of
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 public convey.
Firstly
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, in some cases using
for
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apply
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free
transportation
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 can benefit
on
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apply
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drivers
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,
such
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 as their salaries,
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and respects
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respects
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respect
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, If
people
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 ride on the free route, no one will pay the
drivers
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. about their respects, Some
people
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 may speak disrespectfully to
drivers
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 and invade their privacy.
In addition
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,
There
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there
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 is no other source of income
besides
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 wages, gasoline, and fuel
has
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 been and
is
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are
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 still expensive. And utilizing
transportation
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 for
fee
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fees
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it
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apply
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could be a very enormous issue.
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, Making them free can put a heavy financial burden on governments, leading to higher taxes or cuts in other public services. In conclusion, even
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people
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though people
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 demand from the government about free
transportation
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,
that’s
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that is
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 clearly seen that free routes don't
last
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 long, and eventually problems start to arise.

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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion. For example, say 'I agree' or 'I disagree' at the start.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas should be organized logically. Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader.
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Avoid vague phrases. Use specific examples to support your points, like mentioning a city or country that has free public transport.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure your conclusion summarizes your main points and restates your opinion clearly.
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You present both sides of the argument, which is good for showing balance in your writing.
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You mention the benefits of free public transport, which adds depth to your essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • subsidize
  • sustainability
  • commuters
  • congestion
  • infrastructure
  • accommodate
  • equitable access
  • public transportation system
  • allocating resources
  • financial burden
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