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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

A group of
people
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 believe that the amount of recycled waste is not considerable. These individuals claim that the only solution to increase that amount is by sanctioning laws by governments in order for
people
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 to
recyle
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recycle
 more waste. I vehemently agree
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 the long-term cultural benefits and its potential to force everyone to take part in
this
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 important action. One of the main reasons why laws are important to make
people
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 recycle more is their long-term effect on communities' habits. When individuals
used to
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recycle more over time, they unconsciously pass
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 beneficial habit to
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 next generations.
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, it becomes a part of a society's culture. When something important like recycling becomes a law and
people
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 are forced to do it, like driving rules
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, over time because
people
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 do not want to become punished in some way, they gradually start to do it by nature and not doing it will be something unsatisfactory. Another reason is that sometimes the only way to encourage the majority of the population to take part in an important action is by sanctioning laws. Many individuals are not interested in getting to know about the importance of an action like recycling since they might consider it
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an unnecessary job.
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, a simple way to attract their attention is by making recycling a law to
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 them
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 it whether they like it or not. Since sparing more time and putting more
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 into
recycling
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the recycling
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 process may
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 it for the majority of
people
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 rather than paying penalties, it can increase the recycling process in a country. In conclusion,
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 the long-term cultural benefits of making recycling obligatory in a country and
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 enforcing unhappy citizens who do not want to pay penalties because of not obeying the law, making recycling a rule could potentially increase its process in a country.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and give a strong conclusion that summarizes your points.
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Try to use more linking words to improve the flow of your ideas, such as 'firstly', 'in addition', and 'for example'.
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Add specific examples or data to support your points about the benefits of recycling laws.
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You have provided clear reasons why laws can help increase recycling.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction sets a clear direction for the essay on the topic of recycling.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Waste management
  • Recycling
  • Sustainability
  • Mandatory
  • Voluntary
  • Legislative measures
  • Environmental impact
  • Public awareness
  • Regulation
  • Sanctions
  • Compliance
  • Recycling facilities
  • Consumer behavior
  • Waste reduction
  • Resource conservation
  • Circular economy
  • Eco-friendly
  • Biodegradable
  • Landfill
  • Global initiative
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