In certain countries, the number of people who use bicycle as the mean means of transport is reducing, even though it is beneficial, both physically and environmentally. What can be the reasons for this change in preference, how can people be in courage to use bicycles

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cycling is fruitful for
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, physical
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and
environment
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the environment
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, yet the usage of
bikes
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as
mean
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transport
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of transport
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is reducing day by day in many countries. The advancement of technology in automobiles and difficulties
to access
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in accessing
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long distances by
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bicycles
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bicycle
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are the main reasons
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tendency. The public can be dedicated to
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cycling
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by governments by implementing new plans for bike users and addressing
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health
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benefits gained by cycling. The primary
reasons
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reason
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why there is
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in
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use
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the use
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of
bicycles
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by people is that the technological advancements in motor vehicles
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individuals
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to buy cars for travelling purposes, making them less interested in riding
bicycles
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. By using modern vehicles,
person
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can reach his destination in very less time, leaving much of the time left to be used productively.
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, commuting long distances by bicycle is nearly impossible
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which working
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choose alternative means of transport to access their workplace. Riding a bike requires
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amount of energy which in return would
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users
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work output in performing tasks
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performance of car travellers remains unaffected because they travel quickly without using much of their energy. A viable measure to motivate
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to
use
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bicycles
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is that governing bodies must introduce rewarding programmes for cyclists in order to attract new riders.
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,
administration
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must take
initiative
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to set
limit
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on
distance
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the distance
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travelled by motor vehicles, the exceeding distance must result in
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the imposition
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of fines which will promote
usage
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the usage
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of
bikes
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for local
use
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.
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step must be taken on
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an individual
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basis, analysing the
health
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benefits of riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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. Presently, workers have to sit for long hours in front of computers.
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professional lifestyle, physical well-being is lagging behind which can
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by
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use
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the use
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of
bikes
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. Employers must
also
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introduce cycling plans for the employees to maintain
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a healthy
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life. In conclusion, the major causes of
decreasing
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the decreasing
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trend of bicycle
use
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are
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of technical approaches in the field of automobiles and
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the difficult
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accessibility of long distances by
bikes
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which can be tackled by the implementation of new policies for cycling by law-makers and personal acknowledgement of
health
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benefits.

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