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Some people like to try new things, for example, places and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion

Nowadays,
people
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's behaviour is different toward new
things
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, like places and
food
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. Some individuals prefer new experiences,
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 others like routine activities and meals. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both attitudes and provide my opinion later. On the one hand, there are reasons that encourage
people
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 to do new
things
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. Starting with excitement, a lot of
people
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 do it to feel excitement; it does not matter if they waste money or time as long as they feel satisfied with the experience. To illustrate, even if the
food
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 was not tasty or the activity was boring, basically, they only want the feeling. Another reason is that a part of them wants a wide knowledge of everything; they have a curiosity, which pushes them toward new
things
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.
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, foody
people
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 they
are always go
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 to new restaurants, despite the type of
food
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, and they have a wide range of information about all cuisines.
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, others who chose the same
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 routinely. Perhaps because they find the new experiences stressful, and they have difficulties adapting to new
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.
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, when they travel to another city, they hardly adjust to the bed.
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, staying in
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 comfort zone is the better option for them.
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, they have a fear of what if the
food
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 is not good enough; literally,
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 is what they are afraid of; they think
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 is a waste of time and money. From my perspective, I believe in freedom everyone can do what can do what he or she
want
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. As long as
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 is not dangerous or unethical.
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, it seems that the different behaviours are normal; generally, it depends on the person and his or her preferences.
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, it is not about the good side or the bad side.

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You introduced the topic well and stated your opinion clearly at the end.
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You identified both sides of the argument, which shows good understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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